That was not smart – starting it with the story of your dying father and then trying to shock the reader with the phrase "story of how I died" – no reasonable link at all between the scenario set-up and your overwhelmingly confusing tag line. And where did you get that line about "point(ing) Buddha’s hand" – malarky.

You have some talent putting words together in effective sentences but your knowledge of Life is inadequate. For example, how are we to believe that you are 5′10" being born in such a short ethnic group, to a short woman and an undescribed man, probably not large since you were holding him like a baby. And I seriously doubt that a mother from a basically animist cultural background would be proud of a physical abnormality like you described. More likely she would have hid you from the rest of society. And though she MIGHT have handled the frogs with the aplomb you describe, it’s hard to really believe in it. Your attempts at vivid imagery are uncontrolled and thus lose their effectiveness – you can’t go from "maggots that dug into flesh" to "bellies full of other people’s pain." Not sure about all those foreign language references – they’re overdone and confusing for an English reader. Potters don’t chisel.
Sorry, but you need quite a bit more education before you can tap that wellspring of talent and enthusiasm. You might also want to consider planning your stories in more depth before geting to the words, as there is little or no sign of plot development, even early stages. It’s almost as if you’re writing stream-of-consciousness and that will never work. (minor point: Check again whether one can use flimsy bamboo "leaves" (which are relatively short and not of uniform width) to weave a basket.) And mothers, particularly Asian motheres do not "listen obediently" to one of their children – they expect their children to do that for THEM – and how does one listen obediently while not paying attention. Piles of clothese do not "slither" There are just too many small glitches in logic and reality (and a few – not too many -grammatical faults) to list here.
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